"Kenyota" idea feedback.

[SRBrant]

Long time no see, guys! Say, I've been writing the Kitsune Society's manifesto lately and I would like some feedback with regards to the group's political model. Here's an excerpt:

We will build a new nation, one where merit is the hallmark of political power rather than popularity or affluence. A nation that is built to shift, adapt and thrive in an ever-changing world without fragmenting itself by staying true to the fundamental morals of expression, faith and harmony. A nation that knows each and every citizen without infringing on their basic rights to privacy and discretion. A nation defined and identified not by geography, but by ideology. A nation that incorporates the elements of a tribe, a religion, a micronation and a secret society, creating a new kind of polity for which there must be a new name:

A Kenyota.

An unusual name, yes, based not on any particular real life language, but on the emotions triggered by its syllables. “Ken” to imply firm, unbuckling strength; “Yo” to represent the depths of the immaterial will and its dynamic nature of its people; and “Ta” to symbolize its practical aspects and the ambition of its concept. The very name “Kenyota” implies a new way of thinking because of its separation from all political terminology and its intuitive etymology. The politics of the mind are not shaped by ideas, but by the words that carry them.

Because a Kenyota is a political entity based upon ways of thinking rather than geographical location, what qualifies as territory are population centers where its respective ideology is most prevalent, usually to varying degrees of demographic popularity. To facilitate this, sections of demographic “territory” are called “Wane” (“Wa” to represent a larger whole and “Ne” to represent something small), with an appropriate suffix to denote the prevalence of a Kenyota’s state ideology.

But the Kenyota is NOT a sovereign nation in keeping in line with both its own ideology-based nature and the law of its parent country. No ruler, no matter how virtuous they may or may not be, will not approve of an upstart entity they’ve never heard of with an ideology they don’t agree with trying to take any chunk of territory away from their union. That’s how wars are started. We do not overtake or occupy; we wrap ourselves around our communities like lacquer on wood, protecting and beautifying all it touches.

Charity is a major cornerstone of a Kenyota, not only for its moral integrity, but for its political and legal stability as well. No self-respecting citizen is going to tolerate being taxed (literally and/or figuratively) by an entity with a way of thinking that they do not approve of or believe in — especially if they are in a position of authority. Nor do they appreciate their own community being treated as the personal playground of another group; a Kenyota must present itself and act as a contributor to the community it shares its influence with unless it plans on being regarded as a neighborhood parasite.

The foundation of a Kenyota is based upon these three values:

- Expression: The permissions of its people to speak their minds and souls without undue or unfair reprimand and to indulge in whatever they seek to do so long as the rights of others are not compromised.

- Faith: The ability and allowance of its people to follow what their heart desires, be it science, religion, the arts or their personal hobbies and interests.

- Harmony: The responsibility of its people to adapt to and coexist with each other and the environment that surrounds and sustains us.

There is a survivalist aspect to the Kenyota as well. The future of our nation and our planet is more uncertain than ever and America is following in the same steps that the old Roman Empire took before its collapse. The Kenyota exists not only to serve the community and provide it with the values and symbols it needs, but to maintain order in the event of the collapse of civilization.

[Canuckster]

where the fuck have you been?

[Som-Pong]

In the spectrum of sexual deviancy there are few fetishes that perplex the vanilla mind more than furries. Yes, there are people who spend thousands of dollars to dress up like an animal and engage in group sex, but the really weird part is, some of them don’t even care about the sex. Whether they’re, “Yiffing” (furry sex) or not, they’re everywhere and have conventions to prove it. One such convention had its 7th anniversary this weekend and that made us wonder, where did this fetish come from, and how can we get in on this.

The Furry Weekend Atlanta is much like any other fan-led convention, complete with singing and dancing competitions, art shows, parades and raging parties every night. But unlike any other convention, these people were dressed head-to-toe as their favorite animals, and they tend to form fur piles in the wee hours of the morning. The conventions are a place were furries can live it up without being judged, although it’s highly suggested that you change out of your costume before hitting the streets. You see a lot of weird shit in the ATL but a parade of furries in bondage gear may be a bit too much, for right now anyway.

Not all furries are freaks and weirdoes who can only get laid when they’re dressed as a dragon, it’s a lot bigger than that. This thing started way back in the day when writers and artists created animals with human characteristics. These super-sexy anthropomorphs titillated humans and thus the furry fandom began. So sit back dear reader, you’re about to learn something.

The year is 1985, and Judy Niver of the Cartoon and Fantasy Organization was bored and annoyed with all the robots and aliens that flocked to the San Diego ComicCon. She decided to throw a party for her furry friends and that, as they say, was history. The party raged on and every year after that furries flock to her hotel room waiting to get a piece of the action.

In the early 90’s there’s enough interest in the furry community to host their very own conventions free of robots and alien scum. AntroCon and ConFurence Zero started it all, and things just got crazy from there. By the time ConFurence 8 rolled around the Internet had proliferated the furry community. Conferences became less of a chance to get together, read comic books and not be judged, and more of a place to get together and have dirty, kinky furry sex everywhere.

And dirty, kinky, furry sex they had. In elevators, the conference halls, orgies spilled out into the hallways, “Pet” auctions, where you could purchase a willing sex slave for the weekend, were held and drugged out wolves ran around in nothing but their masks and Dixie Cups.

This sort of behavior didn’t sit well with some in the furry community. Here they are trying to just have a legitimate convention and these heathens are turning them into weeklong, wild, sex parties. The folks at ComiCon never had this much trouble.
So now there are two factions of furries, Burned Furs and the Freezing Furs.

The Burned Furs are your fundamentalists who oppose the grotesque sexual activities their furry brethren were involved in. They worried the furry’s reputation was being smeared with lots and lots of semen, and did not adequately represent the entire population. The Freezing Furs formed in opposition. They were shocked that not everyone got the memo about the wild sex; that’s what they signed up for. They wanted to continue having their fur fueled sex parties, because really what’s wrong with an animal orgy every once in a while?

Divided, the Burned Furs took over the convention, moved the location and did not invite the Freezing Furs. As a result, nobody cared or wanted to go to their conventions any more. What’s the point of spending thousands on a suit if you’re not going to get some? There’s just no point at all.

In the mid 2000s the mainstream media found out about the salacious parties these furries were having. They were jealous, demonized the members as freaks and pedophiles and completely ignored the, let’s call them, psychological benefits of belonging to the furry community. The furries loved their community and sex parties, but also didn’t want the world to see them as pedophiles. They had to band together. They needed to protect the image of the furry. Not everyone is a creepy, loser who can only get laid by camouflaging their entire body with a mountain lion suit. Most furries are normal people who, thanks to Disney and children’s TV in the 80’s and 90’s, fetishized animal characters. They enjoy dressing up as animals for a few weekends out of the year and if a massive orgy happens, they yiff on mother fucker, they yiff on.

Today, every major city has a furry convention. You can attend the Rocky Mountain Fur Con in August this year at the Marriott in DTC. Or meet up with the furry community in your area here. Word has it they’re very understanding and if all you want to wear is a set of ears and a tail your first few times, that’s all up to you.

So there you go, there’s your history lesson for the day now you can go on knowing more about furries than any of your friends.

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Just guessing here.

[SRBrant]

where the fuck have you been?

What do you mean?


Oh! Sorry, I've been writing my novel and working on other projects.

[Som-Pong]

If you would like specifics on other projects please see above.

[Luigi]

Lmao

[SRBrant]

But really, I can use some constructive criticism. Anyone?

[Masato]

Hey SRBrant..! welcome back

This is very interesting... though dangerous territory;



The idea of trying to create a 'manifesto' of sorts imo is a likely futile battle of semantics that can never be won, and will eventually degrade into a new system of legal terms and lawyers, which is exactly what we're trying to avoid, lol Lots of great lines in your draft for example, but if anyone challenged to define the terms specifically, it would be a puzzle right away.

It would be my inclination to be DELIBERATELY vague... like a poet, try to capture the essence in as few words as possible, but deliberately so that readers will know it is not meant to be taken in any specific legal terms.

How much of this came through contact with 'gods'?

I'd also like to learn more about your novel and your approach to writing! The construct of Story is somewhat of a passion of mine

[SRBrant]

Hey SRBrant..! welcome back

This is very interesting... though dangerous territory;



The idea of trying to create a 'manifesto' of sorts imo is a likely futile battle of semantics that can never be won, and will eventually degrade into a new system of legal terms and lawyers, which is exactly what we're trying to avoid, lol Lots of great lines in your draft for example, but if anyone challenged to define the terms specifically, it would be a puzzle right away.

It would be my inclination to be DELIBERATELY vague... like a poet, try to capture the essence in as few words as possible, but deliberately so that readers will know it is not meant to be taken in any specific legal terms.

How much of this came through contact with 'gods'?

I'd also like to learn more about your novel and your approach to writing! The construct of Story is somewhat of a passion of mine

Ah, thanks. And I'm afraid that their input was quite minimal. Though I _think_ they like it, but I sense that there's something really big missing from it.

[Masato]

Not 'missing from it'... imo you have too much!

The magic will come from simplifying it.

There is a saying that goes like: "If you can't explain something simply, you don't understand it well enough".

I have always liked this and believe it to be true. I'm having this same struggle with my own writing at the moment; I am attempting to construct part 3 of a trilogy of which I've completed parts 1&2. My goal is to bring the whole story together, but I find it is still just way too messy and too many unanswered questions. I could simply explain everything but this is bad screenwriting (show, don't tell!).

I have been through this before; I have to wait and wait until the right thing comes together that makes everything SIMPLE and makes the whole thing 'click'. Usually in my experience this comes from letting go of a lot of unnecessary stuff, and finding the simple bare essence of the original intention. When you find this, it will become instantly clear what to drop, what to change/how to change it, and what is gold.

This is the hardest part of writing, imo. Its excruciating for me right now, lol I'm so close but KNOW its not clicking yet. Still searching for that magic to bring it into tune